abandoned farm, Dublin, Ohio
Raking the stillness
I leant on hope
watching memory gravels
clogging my rusty desires
and I fell on a lost trail
wounding my pride.
I yearn for warmth
of a woolen caress
to smooth wrinkled needs.
I search sunshine
in the blazing wet spirits
burning my feisty soul
I hear a cough
from mislaid wishes
mowing at wry silence
I believe it is
a momentary interlude
trespassing my life
I trust it will pass
with the rolling wheel of time
into a new dawn
bringing shimmer of faith.
~ET 06/09/2011
Written for Magpie tales #81.I tampered with the brightness of the pic,my apologies! Do visit other takes on this prompt:)
39 comments:
memory gravels ?
They make a rough road to follow, that's for sure...
Raking the stillness
I leant on hope
it defines the core of the poem
ahh HOPE ... its such an UNPREDICTABLE word
kudOz for the poem..!
i like it..!
:)
tc
keep writing
dasvadaniya
suvaiba..!
I love this! Love it! "Raking the stillness, leaning on hope" So well done!
je baat !
Loved it :D
lovely rolling words that play around in my mouth as I read it out loud! thankyou!
hi thanks friend 4 passing by..good blog yours..cheers:)
Beautiful and melancholy, like the whistling of the wind as it swirls the dust of a sere landscape. These are soulful words crafted into a satisfying whole...
and Faith is important to do something great in life ..
Bikram's
Good one!
hitching a ride in rusted trails
I love the four last lines...
JJRod'z
There is a lot to like in this poem - but my fav lines are these : I hear a cough
from mislaid wishes -
beautifully expressed
This is nicely written.. well thought light.. each line kind of sculpted.. for any discerning mind to understand.. signs of good poetry indeed...
Hand on heart stuff, thanks for sharing.
Seemed the farm was speaking.A good peiece
ah, that thing called memory
it comes and goes
lovely
A beautiful write....:-)
There is not much more depressing than abandoned dreams but as you say all we need is a glimmer of hope! Beautifully written.
Lots of wordplay here, which I like! And it makes me think of writer's block...
Simply wonderful. My fave line :
'I yearn for warmth of a woolen caress to smooth wrinkled needs'
I love it from the very beginning. Good job!
This one seemed to pull me in several directions at once, but I grabbed ont the hope aspect and held it. Wonderful writing. Thought provoking.
http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/09/09/he-was-a-ford-man-2/
So may layers. Beautiful ones all. Sigh.
Faith triumphs..beautiful weave.
Hi:)
thankyou for visiting my BLOG..! :)
pleasure reading your poem..!
great lines ..!
tc..! :)
@Cad
Yes I agree :)
@Suvaiba
Thank you for such encouraging words:)
@Mystic_Mom
:) Thank you,glad you liked it!
@Spiritual Sinner
:D Awai kuch likh diya
Thanks:)
@Gerry Snape
Thank you:)
@R.Ramesh
Thank you for dropping by:)
~Cheers
@Nicholas V.
you gave such a lovely description of the melancholy in it!Thank you for that:)
@Bikram
Exactly :)
@Gautami
Thank you:)
@JJ Roa Rodriguez
Glad you liked them:)
@Jo Bryant
Thank you so much:)
@Ramesh
I hope so:)
Thank you for dropping by..
@Tracy
:)anytime
@Anil
Thank you:)
@Suz
It does,isn't it?
Thank you!
@Carrie
Thank you:)
@Stafford
Yes and we have to move on!
Thank you for your kind words:)
@li
:)
@Lena
Thank you so much for such encouraging words:)
@ShonEjai
Glad you liked it:)
@charleslmashburn
Thank you so much:)
@Zeba
What a lovely thing to say:)
Thank you...
@Alka
Thank you:)
@R.Ramesh
Hi:D
I sometimes go dormant on my own blog :D
@Suvaiba
Anytime lady,you have a cool blog:)
Thank you for your compliment...
I like the expression of woolen touch to smoothen the wrinkles. Of course it is best to take life in a stride, as it comes. All & everything is a part of life, even the interludes!
Love the lyric!
@Mona
Thank you,glad you liked it:)
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