I have two pieces for this:
Take #1
“It’s amber or…hmph…may be chrome yellow” she said.
“It’s dark yellow, I think”, he said.
“There is nothing known as dark yellow”
“Why is that? If you can have dark green or brown, what’s wrong with dark yellow?”
“No! It could be Urobilin or Goldenrod” her chin going up.
“Ahh…could be what?” he gave a no-clue expression.
“I said…”, then she looked up at the stranger beside her “Urobilin?...Goldenrod?” giving him a duh expression.
He shrugged with a blank expression.
“Let’s ask the artist. Who is it by the way? Do you know him?”
Narrowing her eyes and searching for a name on the painting…
”It’s some Nick Tad”, he interrupted.
“Ohh, do you know him?” she started scanning the room.
He removed his hands from his pockets, uncurling them first; pressed his lips tightly.
Coughing “Hi, this is Nick Tad and it’s dark yellow”, he informed.
Turning around, he left the room smiling; leaving behind a gaping
****
Take #2
Arid, dry they fall
without a din
along a calm breeze
waving, swinging
back and forth
beckoning autumn
blithely ardent
lay in a golden-stretch
those aged leaves.
Churned, stomped
underneath a sadist being
they soar edgily
flinging dust
now making noise
summoning winter
sullenly somnolent
lay in a earthy-mellow
those aged leaves.
without a din
along a calm breeze
waving, swinging
back and forth
beckoning autumn
blithely ardent
lay in a golden-stretch
those aged leaves.
Churned, stomped
underneath a sadist being
they soar edgily
flinging dust
now making noise
summoning winter
sullenly somnolent
lay in a earthy-mellow
those aged leaves.
17 comments:
Ha! Loved that!!
Dark yellow, indeed.
The second take is for me. I really like it.
@Jason :D Actually I am one of those few females, who have dead brains when it comes to colours other than the normal 7 colours!
@Dave Thank you :)
Yeah, its the verse for me as well.
I like the poem too; I don't suppose you get much autumn in Mumbai.
Thanks for visiting,
Friko
whoa... i admit.. I didn't see the twist coming in take# 1
AND m very bad with Poems and Proses...
but somehow I could relate with the take# 2 of yours...
Thanks :) for finally being the one who was able to drill through my dead poetic part :D
lmao. so is it dark yellow?
btw ur about me thing is marvellous. r u?
@Tracy(Petty Witter) Thank You...
@Friko You are absolutely right...Autumn is quite rare here...
Thanks for dropping by :)
@Antriksh :D I am so glad you could relate to the Poem. Even for me,verses hit gradually n bit by bit.Poets are too clever a group for me...
@Raj It's Dark Yellow, yes!:D
Thank you...I think I mite be...ohh the modest me doesnt like to admit it so easily :D
summoning winter
Perish the thought! LOL :)
@Jinksy haha.Sure...:D
Oh yes, that verse is so good! I really like that Magpie and can see/feel the whole scene.
@Lydia Thank you so much:)
loved the story.. very nice..
@Alkaline Thank you so very much :)
Awsome..awsome..awsome..i hope and wish that my kids read ur poems as syllabus in their school.
@Meena Ohmigod Thank you so much...You made my day!This went straight to my heart....:)
Thank you...
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