This one is for Magpie Tales. Have a look at the amazing takes on this prompt from fellow bloggers.
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as shared at Magpie Tales
It was getting quite dark outside; she couldn’t see clearly through the mess.
She reached out for the last box and gave up. It was too dark to make out its contents.
With a grunt she stood up and searched for the switch.
It had to be somewhere around here.
Cursing a little, she started feeling her way through the clutter in her basement. Finally her hand hit the switch and light poured in the damp and dirty basement.
That’s when she saw the discarded rusty fan lying in the far corner of the room, on the floor. Along with the rust she saw the fan tinted with lot of yellow patches.
She went closer to get a better look at it.
Squinting, she picked it up. Scraping the little patch, she tried to smell it.
Hmm.
So this is where her jelly beans and orange gumdrops went. Her missing candies have been coming down here, been devoured by sticky-hands. She was sure the culprits were her 4 year old twins.
Boxes forgotten, she stomped her way up to the nursery.
40 comments:
Interesting take on the prompt :)
@Sue :)Thank you so much...
The little kids! If they could do that without being discovered before, there must be something in them - and it's a double dose of smart alecs!. Great writing!
@Kaykuala oh yeah these little ones get smarter by generation...Thank you for your kind words :)
..kids are getting more unpredictable and silly these days... as you said get smarter by generation... i didn't expect that twist in the end when i began reading some lines in the beginning.. i enjoyed it and the twins..haha..(:
~kelvin
@Kelvin True that...I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
Thank you for dropping by...
ha. sounds like something my little brother would have done back in the day...
Great little story (I thought her finding the switch would somehow start the fan!!)
Golly gumdrops?! LOL ♥
A little slice of life. I like your take on the prompt.
But I don't think it's the kids...
Double trouble!
@Brian yeah it also sounds like me and my sis...we are twins :)
@Doctor FTSE Now that would have been something to see...it would have scared the hell out of me :D
@Penny(Jinksy) Yummy,right?:)
@M.A.S. hmmm,on second thoughts yeah you are right...This doesn't look that simple,isn't it? :D
@Tess yeah...super double trouble!:)
The power of brevity and mystery....
Very amusing story and an original take on the prompt!
Thank you for your comment about my poem.
What fun.
Or not. I have a 4-year-old grandniece, whom I love all to bits, but there's only one of her. LOL
A good story. I could just imagine her sniffing jelly-bean bits.
— K
Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel
@Alka it sure is, thank you for dropping by :)
@Nicholas Glad you liked it,you have a brilliant imagination urself :)
@Kay L. Davies Oh yeah n they are such pure joy to watch,isn't it?
I imagined the scenario, and I can't help but think of how the twins did it. Cute!
@the green breaker Thank you :)
A cute little story! :)
Very imaginative. Jelly beans! What an idea. And a great story, well told. Great job!
Very imaginative. Jelly beans! What an idea. And a great story, well told. Great job!
@Damyanti Thank you so much:)
@gsb3 Thank you so much for such encouraging words:)
Enjoyed the read and I did not guess where it was going till the very end!! Well done!!
@Nanka Thank you :)
twins- twice the fun and maybe twice the work? Fun read!
Ah, that's a losing battle to try to hide candy from 4-year-olds. Interesting slant on the prompt. Thanks for visiting my blog too!
@Kathe W. Thank you so much :)
@Other Mary Thank you for dropping by, glad I visited your blog, you have alovely blog :)
Love the ending, I did not see that coming. Twice the candy with twins! :) Enjoyed it.
Unique twist! I was waiting to be scared...but got a nice chuckle at the end.
@waysidewordgarden Glad you enjoyed it, Thank you for dropping by:)
@li haha...just tried not to be scary this time...Thank you for dropping by...
LOL: It's just as bad when they are 10. My son is really good at sniffing out all my hiding places.
@Amanda :D Its sometimes scary how their minds work...
Great take on the picture. I can see how Nicholas' and yours share some elements, but certainly both are original and satisfying!
What a "sweet" take on this prompt. Twins with loose candy just has to be a dangerous combination!
@Penthe Thank you for your kind words
@Lydia :) True that...That's a dangerous combination :)
Just gone thru some of your posts. Do you always write this beautiful? :)
Very cute story. Keep it up.
@Nisha
Thank you so much for dropping by,you made my day:)
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