Wednesday, August 17, 2011

Such is life....


Image by Tess as

shared at Magpie tales

Jane stepped on the front porch of her little cottage. She hadn’t seen Robin all day, but she was too tired to think about her 5year old. Juggling her newborn, Kierra, from one hip to other she searched for the keys in her purse.

If only her husband was still alive, he would have been there with her all along.
In a moment of helplessness, soothing her restless baby, she dropped the keys on the door mat. Cursing under her breath, with every ounce of her strength she retrieved them.
Three bloody stitches, big ones all paining at the same time. How is somebody expected to manage them singlehandedly all at once was getting beyond her.
But she got Kierra out of it, she smiled.

She opened the door and stood for a whole minute to look around.
Where are you Robin? What are you up to?

Placing her bags by the door, trying to ignore her empty stomach, she went straight to Robin’s room. As expected he was not there.
She dragged herself to the adjacent room, once a parlor, was now turning into a store room. It was locked from inside. She knocked and called out.

Robin, are you in there? Mama’s home, sweetie.

Coming said a muffled voice.
The door slowly opened and she was spellbound.

All messed up, Robin was standing there and beaming at them. The room was painted with a big welcome note in wobbly words, for his kid sister. Sparkles on every free surface and a small table in the middle of the room with small candles and clumsily put together peanut-butter-lettuce sandwiches and baby bottle of milk and whole jug of lemonade.

Tears in her eyes, her faith in God rekindled!



Written for Magpie tales #78. Have a look at other lovely takes on the prompt.

28 comments:

Everyday Goddess said...

yes, such is life. sometimes unbearable, sometimes a nice surprise. hopefully, more nice surprises than unbearable-nesses.

Helen said...

How could I not fall in love with your Magpie .....

Doctor FTSE said...

Lovely little story! Big "Ahhh" all round.

Nicholas V. said...

Touching take on this Magpie. A lovely read!

Zoe said...

Erratic Thoughts,
This is beautiful. You had me hooked from the start, but the ending still had me in tears and was totally unexpected. Just beautiful!

kaykuala said...

Such a touching story. Youngsters given the privilege of sharing would necessarily reciprocate with surprises!

Old Ollie said...

Optimistic tale - on this early day. Thanks.

Tarang Sinha said...

a well crafted, touching tale indeed!

Strummed Words said...

A sweet story...

Lolamouse said...

Lovely story. Children will rise to the occasion if given the chance.

Nanka said...

Enjoyed the read and it did tug at my heart!! Well written!!

Lena said...

Oh, my! This little piece has moistened my eyes, it's rather touching, this sibling acceptance token.

My oldest son wanted his wee brother to be posted to China......!!

knightsheart said...

Very touching. Thank you for the feel good. i was reminded of my older daughter welcoming her sister home from the hospital.

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Lovely story - made me feel quite full!

Anna :o]

Mystic_Mom said...

That so is something my son would do! A great story from the prompt, I love it...wonderfully done!

WINDOWLAD said...

..indeed that's touching and nicely incorporated.. i really enjoyed the read.. thank you!(:

~Kelvin

Raj said...

touchy that. well written. but it should have been more descriptive. add a little punch. a little essence of pain. a little more salt. and then you will have a masterpiece :)

Jackie Jordan said...

It's not the end result, but the effort that should be appreciated and rewarded. Should my girls have made any attempt at improvement, I would have brought them to Chucky Cheese every Saturday for a month...

Spiritual Sinner said...

simple , touching and honest ...

Combined effect .... AWESOME ! :D

Erratic Thoughts said...

@Everyday Goddess True,I hope so too:)

@Helen Thank you, that means a lot to me :)

Erratic Thoughts said...

@Doctor FTSE
Thank you for your kind words:)

@Nicholas V.
Thank you :)

Erratic Thoughts said...

@Zoe
I m so glad you liked it:)

@Kaykuala
True,sweet surprises indeed:)

Erratic Thoughts said...

@Old Ollie
It does make a morning good,right?:)

@Tarang Sinha
Thank you :)

Erratic Thoughts said...

@Strummed Words
Oh,Thank you so much:)

@Nanka
Glad you liked it, my pleasure :)

Erratic Thoughts said...

@Lena
Haha,lol...Sounds like me and my sister :D
Siblings can be our biggest rivals when we are children :D

@knightsheart
Glad I brought back some sweet memories for you :)

Erratic Thoughts said...

@HyperCRYPTICal
Thank you so much for your kind words:)

@Mystic_Mom
Lovely,Kids are full of sweet surprises...You can never tell whats on there minds!

Erratic Thoughts said...

@WINDOWLAD
Thank you for taking time to read it and for the kind words:)

@Raj
Thank you for your feedback..
I wanted to keep it short,doing so, I might have missed some points...Will keep them in mind next time I write...:)

Erratic Thoughts said...

@Jackie Jordan
You got the crux of it...the very idea of giving such a sweet surprise and working on it, in itself is very special and it should rewarded, which could be Chucky Cheese every Saturday for a month! :)

@Spiritual Sinner
Thank you so much,it made my day :)